Overhauled

Bulldozers remodel neighbor’s home, fallen timbers unforgiven.

Pot-bellied men pin and tuck saggy bits, resurfacing structure.

Gaudy new facade exposes more faults than it conceals.

Happy NaPoWriMo Day20. Today’s prompt is to write a new poem form for me called a Sijo. This is a traditional Korean poetic form. Like the haiku, it has three lines, but the lines are much longer. Typically, they are 14-16 syllables, and optimally each line will consist of two parts – like two sentences, or a sentence of two clauses divided by a comma. The first line sets up an inquiry or discussion, the second line continues the discussion, and the third line resolves it with a “twist” or surprise.

Artwork “Summer Breeze” by Galerie Barbara Thumm

9 responses to “Overhauled”

abigfatcanofworms

Ach. Renovation! If only it was a Gaudi facade instead of a gaudy one. 😉

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1. K.Hartless
  
  Brilliant. Yes, it’s not. And yes, it’s really happening next door. Bulldozers for days.
  
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johnlmalone

I like this form: it’s an exciting new form for me: it offers more possibilities than the haiku; I love the second line particularly; great painting and hey! this lovely song actually played; thanks Karen: an inspiring post 🙂

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1. K.Hartless
  
  So glad, John. A fully functioning post. I’m giving myself kudos for the day. I also like the fun of this new form and may continue to craft them. Hope your day has fewer bulldozers in it than mine.
  
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  1. johnlmalone
    
    🙂 oh dear ; remember what Van Morrison said, ‘mama always told me there’d be days like these’ 🙂 I did have some rough patches, Karen, but when I spoke to the ‘grandies’, as Beth calls them, the load lifted 🙂 hope you have a good one 🙂
    
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  2. K.Hartless
    
    I aiming for very quiet, tranquil dreams void of all heavy equipment and little bulldozers 😉
    
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  3. johnlmalone
    
    I wish you a peaceful sleep 🙂 I’m putting that post up now, the one you inspired 🙂
    
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Ron.

Oh yeah, K; you mastered the sijo fer sure. Love the initial image of remodeling by bulldozer, and everything else flowed flawlessly after that. My hat is off.

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1. K.Hartless
  
  Wow, thank you so much, Ron. I really value your opinion, so this means a lot. 😊
  
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