Today’s NaPoWriMo.net prompt asks writers to play with a new poetic form, a Glosa, which is a Spanish poem that starts with a stanza from a poem you admire and then requires the writer to create a stanza that ends with each of these lines (the lines becoming the refrains). Challenge accepted! I chose a treasured poem by a favorite artist: “The Injured Moon” by Charles Baudelaire, translated by Robert Lowell. A challenge, indeed.

Scribbler’s Moon

The lovers sleep openmouthed! When they breathe
they show the white enamel of their teeth
the writer breaks his teeth on his worksheets.
the vipers couple under the hot hill
.

Kisses snake the writer’s skin,
a fuse winding across his body
towards explosion,
and while the words that
lit his flame where penned
perhaps a century past,
the writer grits his teeth
when he dreams, while
the lovers sleep openmouthed. When they breathe

their lusts are all relieved.
But, not the writer
grumbling in golem-like hunger,
a growl that awakens his scribbling,
sloppy as the drool saturating his
pillow, which he enters like a cave,
in search of a cool, quiet dip.
But writers froth fiction, in rabid REM,
they show the white enamel of their teeth,

incisors every writer needs
to cut a new tale,
carve their research into trees,
inspect each shoot and leaf
to determine which form
of verse to dip in ink, conceive.
His poetry leaves puncture wounds;
the writer breaks his teeth on his worksheets,

pencils, now, with no tips.
In the face of new moon blindness,
the writer’s instrument goes limp,
and he swaddles sheets over his head,
a ghost in his own bed,
creativity gone cold by open window.
He fumbles in the nightstand for the right pill, as
the vipers couple under the hot hill.


Cover Art: Joelartaccount

The Injured Moon Charles Baudelaire

Oh Moon, discreetly worshipped by our sires,
still riding through your high blue countries, still
trailed by the shining harem of your stars,
old Cynthia, the lamp of our retreats…

the lovers sleep open-mouthed! When they breathe,
they show the white enamel of their teeth.
The writer breaks his teeth on his worksheets,
the vipers couple under the hot hill.

Dressed in your yellow hood, do you pursue
your boy from night to dawn, till the sun climbs
skyward, where dim Endymion disappears?

“I see your mother, Child of these poor times,
crushed to her mirror by the heavy years.
She cunningly powders the breast that nourished you.”
Translated by – Robert Lowell

16 responses to “Scribbler’s Moon”

  1. Tom Avatar

    This was beautiful, K! ❤ Loved your personal take on it – really vivid imagery throughout 🙂

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    1. Oh, wonderful, Tom. This is most heartening. Are you a fan of Baudelaire? I have deep feelings about his works, and so I’m glad the thread came through for you with this “borrowed line” poem. 💜😊

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      1. Tom Avatar

        I haven’t read his work before, but I’ll definitely check more of it out following your masterpiece here! 🙂 ❤

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      2. 😊💜 Hope he doesn’t disappoint. Let me know what you think.

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      3. Tom Avatar

        I’ve checked out a few more pieces from him & you did a fantastic job weaving your own evocative verses – it’s a great tribute to his influence!

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      4. Thanks, Tom. I love his poetry. It has something risky to it, and it’s always fresh-feeling. Glad you read a bit. Fleur du Mal is a favorite book of mine.

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  2. Fantastic poetry, K. The lines flow effortlessly, and your rhythm and rhyme are perfect. Love this one. 💜

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    1. Oh, that’s wonderful. I was worried it might be a bit muddled, but this is most encouraging. Thank you, Jeff. 💜

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      1. Not muddled at all. Clear, and lovely. You’re most welcome, K. Always. 💜

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      2. So glad to hear it. Many thanks. 💜

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  3. Amazing, K! Just amazing! I took one look at that prompt and the coward in me veered away. But your incredible grasp of it makes me want to try. This is a beautiful work. Amazing! (did I say that already?)

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    writingwhatnots

    K this is wonderful! Love how you have made this poem your own – fabulous images of the writer.

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    1. Thank you so much. A one-day turnaround is tough, but I did have a good time doing this one. And the source poem, well, it was stellar fuel to start a fire. Thank you for reading this one.

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        writingwhatnots

        Stellar fuel to start a fire – yes, indeed!☺️

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  5. I really enjoyed this. A seamless inclusion of the lines into your poem, K. Love the title too.

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    1. Why thank you. I was grateful the artist allowed me to use her beautiful depiction of Diana. Dishes will never be the same for me. 💜

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