Walking into the monument was like wading through elephant grass that had been booby trapped. Somewhere nearby, an unknown elbow; somewhere to my side, my father’s shadow melded to my son’s. I watched our combined reflections grow taller as we sank lower into the V-shaped pathway.

“The villagers’ teeth were black as this granite, “ my father tapped, “from chewing betel nuts.” He looked at our reflection on the gray wall. Frozen.

He leaned in.“Enemies looked exactly like allies.” 

“Enough to make you sick before you got sick,” I said, trying to return him  to the present.

My father stopped in front of another panel near the deepest part of the bend.“It was an ambush, you know?All these guys died this very day. I know because I saw it happen. ”My father saluted all of the names swallowed up by the cold.

© 2024 | K.F. Hartless


d”Verse Poets Pub | Prosery

144 words to include a line from “After someone’s death”  by Swedish Nobel Laureate Tomas Tranströmer.

Photo By:Marvin Lynchard, DOD

29 responses to “Grey Walls”

  1. mesmerizing and disturbing; layer upon layer …..

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    1. Thank you, John. I’ve walked that memorial a few times. A powerful place of reflection.

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      1. you’ve certainly captured it well; the dialogue too was effective —

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  2. An emotional visit, no doubt…your first sentence begins the powerful impression.

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    1. Thank you, Lynn. It is an emotional visit there, everytime.

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  3. The war memorial is a perfect way to use the prompt line… though we have not had anything like this in Sweden.

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    1. Yes, indeed. Thanks, Björn. Neutrality mean no lists of names end up carved on the wall. How wonderful to have no memory of that.

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  4. heartbreaking

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  5. A wonderfully sad story/memory. Very well done and great use of the prompt line.

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    1. Thank you, Dwight. I was glad to try and capture just a bit of what it must be like to visit a memorial after having survived something so devastating.

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      1. You did it very well.

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  6. I was there at the wall, the most memorable of the monuments. You’ve captured that moment, and the genius of the architect who designed it. It silences everyone who approaches.

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    1. Thank you kindly, Yvonne. A somber experience. I have been several times, but the effects do not diminish.

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  7. I’m struck by the poignant reflection in your piece. Also, your dialogue adds depth to the narrative… Well written!

    ~David

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    1. Thank you, David. I tried to remember snippets of what was shared over the years.

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  8. I’ve walked there without the memories–and can’t imagine what it’s like to have them. Powerful story.

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    1. Thank you, Merril. I, too, can only imagine.

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      1. You’re very welcome.

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  9. K, the way you describe this feels like walking into another dimension. The sharp angles, the distorted shadows. For your dad to even speak of it had to be cathartic for him. How many years has he been carrying his dead comrades. The power of his salute is almost more than I can bear.

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  10. Thank you so much, Lisa.I really appreciate your words. I have so many brave service-people in my family. It is something that they don’t always talk about, but their stories are there in the snippets of conversation. In those precious moments of connection and patient listening.

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    Goodness this is powerful!

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  12. This was a deeply felt piece. Grief, shared by two. Powerful!

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    1. Thank you, Dale. I appreciate your kind comments.

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      1. My pleasure.

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  13. I am crying. Tell him thank you and I am sorry for his loss.

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  14. Also your writing here is beautiful.

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    1. Thank you, Nicole. I am very honored that you found this piece moving and memorable. So, I will say on his behalf, thank you for your support.

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  15. Captures the sad reality of military service and raw wounds of brutality and death. I love the reference to all sides being people/human.

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