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This Poem Is Not Concrete

Katie Frances Hartless

This 
poem
is not concrete.
It’s not set in stone
nor cement. It’s sedentary. 
Neither resilient nor reliable,
stable nor sturdy; this poem
is untrustworthy. Deliberately 
flammable, fearless, flirty. 
While it changes shape,
misbehaves, it’s worthy. 
Trim the wick. Watch 
it glow, but don’t 
blow it.
This 
flame
is my poem.

Artwork: “Candle Flame” Michael Creese

NaPoWriMo#28~Create a concrete poem. I dreaded this assignment as a child. I loved the leak of the words and then trying to mold them into a shape, I couldn’t even. But here, I’ve created my anti-concrete, concrete poem. “They tell me to stop, but I keep on going.” The finish line is a few days away. Then, my lovely muse rests.

31 responses to “This Poem Is Not Concrete”

  1. guyleneiswriting Avatar
    guyleneiswriting

    Loved this, as usual.
    By the way, “concrete” also has a double meaning that pairs well with stone and cement.
    And the artwork is absolutely stunning.
    Thank you for posting!

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    1. K.Hartless Avatar
      K.Hartless

      I’m glad you picked up on that. I was hoping to play with the word concrete and then the lovely fluidity of flame. Cheers. I’m so glad you enjoyed it.💜

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  2. Jim W. Avatar
    Jim W.

    wow, hot poem 🔥🔥🚒🚒

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    1. K.Hartless Avatar
      K.Hartless

      Thank you.💜 It was burning in me during my commute. But, I’m glad it took shape this afternoon.

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      1. Jim W. Avatar
        Jim W.

        creativity is fun…at least to start with 😁😁

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  3. John Avatar
    John

    Cool! ❤️☺️

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    1. K.Hartless Avatar
      K.Hartless

      Thank you. 💜

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  4. Tom Avatar
    Tom

    Stunning depictions with such a great contrast between flowing prose and rigid structure. Beautifully penned, K! ❤

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    1. K.Hartless Avatar
      K.Hartless

      Thank you kindly, Tom. Burnt out a bit from this week Only one more day to blaze though. 💜

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      1. Tom Avatar
        Tom

        You’ve got this! ❤ Hope you get time to relax this May Day weekend 🙂

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      2. K.Hartless Avatar
        K.Hartless

        Thank you, Tom. I appreciate the support. I have a wedding that first May weekend, though. But, there should be a far amount of relaxing involved.

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  5. johnlmalone Avatar
    johnlmalone

    a flibbertigibbet of a poem 🙂

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    1. K.Hartless Avatar
      K.Hartless

      Thank you. 🤭

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  6. Ron. Avatar
    Ron.

    H.O.T. Indeed!

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    1. K.Hartless Avatar
      K.Hartless

      🔥 Thanks, Ron.

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  7. Ali Grimshaw Avatar
    Ali Grimshaw

    I really liked this. Great word choice

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    1. K.Hartless Avatar
      K.Hartless

      Thanks, Ali. I appreciate your kind comment. 😁

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  8. Jeff Flesch Avatar
    Jeff Flesch

    Love what you’ve expressed here. I feel this way about a lot of my poems. That, they are in some ways ever evolving, burning, and bright. Wonderful poem, K.

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    1. K.Hartless Avatar
      K.Hartless

      How wonderful. To feel blaze with each verse. I get a bubbly sensation sometimes when the meant-to-be words arrive, and there is a flush as well. 💜🔥

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  9. Carolyn Crossley VixenOfVerse Avatar
    Carolyn Crossley VixenOfVerse

    I love a rebel! I like that you wrote an anti-concrete poem and a well-composed one at that. I am glad we only have one day to go! I have stuck to prompts throughout this year, let’s see what tomorrow brings! ❤🙂❤

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    1. K.Hartless Avatar
      K.Hartless

      Yes, it has been a challenge. I almost turned my back on a few of them, but I’ve been able to plow through these prompts. Today’s is well, not a favorite of mine, but the fairytales sound fun. I’ve been enjoying your responses, Carolyn. Best of luck finishing the final few. 💜

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  10. Simon Avatar
    Simon

    I think it’s best it’s not concrete – it makes it fluid and alive

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    1. K.Hartless Avatar
      K.Hartless

      Thank you very much, Simon. I’m not good with rules, as this poem illustrates perfectly.

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      1. Simon Avatar
        Simon

        Rules are definitely a 2 edged sword… no one like them but in some way we need them I think lol

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      2. K.Hartless Avatar
        K.Hartless

        Yes, If we didn’t have rules, how could we enjoy breaking them. 😂 No, I get it. Rules serve a purpose.

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      3. Simon Avatar
        Simon

        Yeah… Breaking them 😂

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  11. writingwhatnots Avatar
    writingwhatnots

    Love your un-concretey poem – words that need air to breathe…

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    1. K.Hartless Avatar
      K.Hartless

      Thank you. It’s true; I’m anti-smothering.

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      1. writingwhatnots Avatar
        writingwhatnots

        ☺

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  12. Sonam Tsering Avatar
    Sonam Tsering

    Truly beautiful, thank you for coming out with this insightful poem.

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    1. K.Hartless Avatar
      K.Hartless

      Thank you for reading it and leaving me this warm encouragement. It is much appreciated. 😊

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